The son of a powerful businessman, in the process of getting power, fights the same conspiracy that destroyed his father

• Should the amavoan executor show up again?
  • And if so, should they just be an aside or a central character to track down
  • If Edward continues believing that the money has gone walkabout,

Overview

Beginning(~25%)

• Edward discovers The Circle Middle(~50%)
• Gets in direct conflict with The Circle
• Edward gets uber rich
• The Circle gets the upper hand End(~25%)
• Something that unties money from power for Edward
• Rebirth, rise, destroy The Circle at their base

Outline

Beginning

• John burned

  • John making a deal with a smuggler to smuggle his goods across the pond
  • EXIT: John flees Broken Shield with Kingsford and Edward as it goes up in flames

• Edward learns will hath no money

  • Edward years later is stuck at Thrown Axe
  • Edward pickpockets a Lord’s Priest, Gabriel shows up and gives it back
  • Gabriel emphatically argues for Edward to give the church a go
  • EXIT: The executor shows up, imply that the will has no money going to him

• Gabriel looks for Edward

  • Gabriel searches through the house
  • Finds the will
  • Rainbalt tells him direction Edward went in
  • Rainbalt nags Gabriel about joining the guild
  • EXIT: Gabriel knows EXACTLY where Edward is

• Blow up at Rainbalt, drunk

  • Edward is drunkenly zoned out and not listening to bartender talking to him
  • EXIT: Edward explodes at Rainbalt for being a condescending prick

• Decide to destroy him

  • Gabriel checks up on Edward to see if he’s okay
  • Gabriel wants him to apologize
  • Edward has a plan to expand business
  • Edward wants Rainbalt to sell to him and if not then plan B
  • EXIT: Edward decides to go to church with Gabriel…

• Edward-Rainbalt church meeting

  • Rainbalt informs Edward that the reason nobody goes to his stall is because nobody likes him, respectfully
  • EXIT: Rainbalt doesn’t respond to threats, and will not bend to Edward just like he didn’t to others in Saules, Edward declares war to a non-plussed Rainbalt

• **Edward hires a stooge

  • Edward watching with an unaware Gabriel as someone is shouting at Rainbalt for shoddy service
  • The town shouts this actress down as they all love Rainbalt
  • EXIT: Gabriel unwittingly reveals to Edward Rainbalt’s achilles heel: his gregarious nature- Should I reveal that Edward took Gabriel’s advice and twisted it?
  • Pro: Make it clear to the audience what Edward did
  • Con: Could be overexplaining (show, don’t tell)

• Should the audience be in the dark about Edward’s true intentions?

• **Edward cons Rainbalt

  • Edward cries to Rainbalt about
  • EXIT:

• **Edward “rejects” Guy’s invitation

  • Edward rejects Guy’s offer of a “job opportunity” in Broken Shield
  • EXIT: Edward sees the will again and heads to Broken Shield

Middle

• Edward confronts Kingsford about betrayal
  • EXIT: Edward lets him off easy without any bloodshed, but threatens swift retaliation if it does happen

End

Misc

• Race to save a kidnapped ally
• Once Edward really starts making money, other banks start getting in on racket
  • Shock of big bank opening “Branch of the People”
• Kingsford shows up at Amavo
  • He got Edward’s location from someone named Gabriel
• The Banker in prime position to attack with Prioli, but leaves at last minute for emergency meeting
  • Outcome of meeting makes everything so much worse for Edward, but it has to be immediate so as to not be a deus ex machina
  • Related directly to Lord Baron
• Need to save either friend or useful contact, can only do one
• After The Banker has been defeated, find an excommunicated former member of The Circle who dodged the gallows
• Festival of the Lights in Amavo
  • Gabriel spends festival/party researching The Banker’s docs, it’s a lot more fun
  • Tells story of resources being focused towards attempted expeditions to New Gaia
  • John’s inheritence went to Lord Baron
• Edward drinking with Kingsford
  • Edward tosses his drink out sneakily, don’t explain to audience
• Raimbalt attempts to kill Edward, but his security network is so tight that he is able to immediately execute him
• Infiltrating the fantasy vatican
• The mayor of that town Edward sold out has some prominent position that impedes Edward’s progress
  • Not sure if the old fella has clocked that he’s Edward or not
• Crossing a desert in secret
• Everything’s good, Edward has finally made it, and then BOOM
  • After Edward realises that The Circle doesn’t kill and he has free reign to do whatever
• All of Edward’s old enemies (Like the craftsman at the beginning) show up at the end as Circle underbosses
• A definitive point where Edward realises that kings are worth shit against the power of the merchants
• Edward realises that simply cutting the head off the snake doesn’t work, you need to destroy its base
• Edward performs a coup against former allies
• Manipulating an uprising against a noble for Edward’s own personal advantage
• Edward’s allies finally give up on him and they leave
• (Either before or after Gabriel gives up) Edward does something so unforgivable (Potentially destroying the village to kill someone) which signals to the reader that we are at maximum bollock descent into icy water
• Watching helplessly as Amavo/Thrown Axe burns, racing towards something but is made slowly weaker
  • Kingsford caused this
  • Edward needs to save something
  • Finale mirrors this but the circle are powerless this time
• Edward basically causes the feudal apocalypse by getting the people to rebel against nobles and lords, most of whom govern through the will of The Circle
  • Not out of the kindness of his own heart but to destroy The Circle